You hear water slapping the sides of the boat. There is a distant clanking sound. Then something sounds like someone is hitting something with a wooded stick. You hear a slapping sound and you imagine someone picking up some king of slime, possibly seaweed, and throwing it to the ground. A loud creaking noise arises and you think of someone walking across the deck of a sailing ship. Suddenly, you hear the scraping of metal against metal. The rings of a sail scraping against a metal pole as it rises to catch the wind. Little puffs of wind surprise you. The clanking noises grow louder and closer. Loud creaking nosies that sound like falling machinery. You hear the high pitched cry of a gull, flying high above your head. Water sloshing around, minding it's own business. The sound of a train chugging past but you notice it's just another boat. You hear the possible shouts of people as you near the docks. Then the shouts fade as you return to reality and the clip ends.
The part that captured me on Alex blog was how she described the sounds she heard in detail. I also like the way she used her imagination to her blog. It captured me because it made me feel like if I was there.
ReplyDeleteShe described the sound by comparing things to her experiences. She also made me understand and hear the sounds as if I were there which means she was very descriptive. I loved the way she used different Items to make you feel relaxed as if you were the one sailing there.
I think she should have use more similes and metaphors. I think a little more writing would do her well. The rest was magnificent and very understanding.